My professors say my Intros and Conclusions are WEAK
and I always get a 95% on my essays

Can somebody read these and tell me if they are weak?

Intro:
The rising popularity of social networking sites are rivaling for consumption and putting strain on the business aspects of companies in the television and print industry. Internet usage is now cutting into the expenditures of traditional media, such as television and print. With young people spending increased amounts of time online, social networking sites are on the rise and are offering new outlets to marketers. Advertisers now attempt to market their television shows, movies, and print ads effectively through social media sites, such as Facebook and MySpace, in hopes of reaching younger audiences and as a result, have been successful.

Conclusion:
In conclusion, the facts have been presented to clarify the effective movement from traditional media to social media. Social networking sites have opened new doors for advertising in hopes of reaching the younger audience. As a result, they have gained the attention of the older audience. The once popular 20th century inventions are integrating into the Internet and the advertisers who are smart enough will keep following in order to make revenue. The weight of ad money has been slipping off the ship of traditional media and going to the web. Conventional marketers stuck in 20th century marketing standards would be lucky to even find a life boat.

I "Stumbled Upon" www.FtheBigThree.com which does a good job of showing the opportunities that could be available for marketers in the "Social Media" category. Not completely sold yet on it but kinda warming up to it. I guess I’ll have to start learning SMM to go along with my SEM and SEO. So, many abbreviations….so little time.

Companies and brands are looking to engage via social-media, and there are loads of resources. Are there any must-read blogs from your RSS that provide current, practical information (case studies and best-practices) on how advertisers and marketers are engaging appropriately (or not)?

How to use “Social Bookmarking” to Build a “Social Networking Spider Web” – Tip 02B

This topic is on how to get a lot of  sites to link back to your website or blog and to create a lot of targeted traffic by using “social bookmarking” to create a “social networking spider web”! The first part of this post on Social Bookmarking is at http://markvschwartz.com/121/using-social-bookmarking-to-getting-traffic-02/

Social bookmarking is very popular with marketers in every business, hobby or personal niche.  Social bookmarking sites such as StumbleUpon, Digg, Del.icio.us, and Technorati let users to add links to sites they like and make those links public so that other visitors can grab those links and add them to their own lists.  This makes your URLs (website links) go viral.

Social bookmarking sites are a great way to get traffic to your own websites and blogs.  What you do is bookmark your sites and then hope others will share the links.  On some social bookmarking sites like Digg, viewers can vote for your entries and make them even more popular.

If enough people vote for your particular link (that has an article or blog posting associated with it), it might make it to the front page of that bookmarking site.  A front-page listing can yield thousands of visitors a day to your site. However, because of the very nature of social bookmarking sites, if you want to get tons of traffic from the bookmarking sites, you need to make sure that the links you submit are interesting – and not just your sales pitch page.

Take a look at current events to use as a source of information to write about – and then bookmark.  For example – let’s say your blog is in the interior design niche and you have a site on high end interior design.  A simple how-to site may not get shared a lot.

But let’s say you read an article about using simple products from Ikea or KMart for making high-end interior design work on a limited budget.  With this type of topic you’d have a pretty decent shot at having a lot of home owners or interior designers share your links with others.

If your blog tends to be less newsworthy and more general, then you don’t need to worry about how many people vote for your story or share your links.  In this situation, just concentrate on using the social bookmarking sites to build backlinks to your sites, which will increase your search engine popularity.

Concentrate on bookmarking the index page (home or main page) of each of your sites first.

The key to social bookmarking is to become a participant in a community that shares interesting information. Create a good, personal profile that tells a little about you.  Make sure to add some photos, and if the site offers it, start building a friends or fans list.

Be careful not to add too many links each day. Don’t go crazy and add 100 links a day. Try to keep it to 10 or less per day and you will be okay.

After you’ve been a participant for a few weeks, you might be able to get away with up to 50 per day.  And…. make sure to keep bookmarking stories on other websites and vote for a few of the popular stories that made it onto the first page.  This will help to make your profile look a lot more legitimate in the eyes of the community.